In recent years, there has been growing interest in the relationship between equality and personal achievement. Some people believe that individuals can achieve more in egalitarian societies. Others believe that high levels of personal achievement are possible only if individuals are free to succeed or fail according to their individual merits.
What is your view of the relationship between equality and personal success?
It is disputed controversially whether individuals in egalitarian societies can attain more than communities that only praise people in terms of their achievements. In my perspective, I strongly bolster the relationship between equality and personal success, and I will elucidate my opinion in paragraphs below.
On the one hand, societies that evaluate people due to their merits do benefit people as they elevate personal achievements faster. Every human being has a thirst of appreciation, and they will counter to find their own values by excellent evaluations from society. Living in unfair humanities may escalate their quest for appreciation as unfairness can build a person's stronger will to deteriorate communities' inequality and find an opportunity to stand up and flaunt the world their competency. For instance, a plethora of great women scientists succeed due to the unequally outdated preconception of woman as futile, which creates a motivation to substantiate that this conception is inaccurate, to be highly evaluated like man, and later on received appreciation from others.
On the other hand, an equal humanity far outweighs benefits of the former community as an unfair world does not always make individuals stronger. On the contrary, a number of people might anguish from the pressure to success, the fear of failure, which may cause mental illnesses such as depression. Besides, an egalitarian societies may not provide a more elevated lifestyle for everyone, however, they afford a comparable chance for everybody. Every citizen can receive corresponding education, healthcare, entertainment or in other words, an equivalent life. This offers people to comfortably pursue their ambitions, to seek for opportunities to achieve more, also, not enduring the pressure like living in an unfair society, which enhance opportunities to attain more achievements. It can easily be scrutinized by examples of numerous countries, for example, Switzerland, UK or America that endorse and advance equality between man and woman. These countries are more developed and their citizens, both genders obtain more than other countries.
In conclusion, it is surely better to live in an egalitarian according to reasons that I have mentioned previously, in order to success.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 360, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a person' or simply 'persons'?
Suggestion: a person; persons
...or appreciation as unfairness can build a persons stronger will to deteriorate communitie...
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Line 4, column 61, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... surely better to live in an egalitarian according to reasons that I have mention...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, if, may, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in other words, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1936.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5632183908 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18322848468 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591954022989 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 624.6 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8273361336 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.285714286 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8571428571 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.85714285714 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201771668464 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695596498647 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523515276127 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117827741924 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0622746689178 0.056905535591 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.27 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 78.4519038076 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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