Some colleges encourage students to create businesses while they are still in school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
Recently, more and more colleges give the chance to students to do businesses while they are still studying. This raises a question, is it a good idea to do that? Personally, I believe that the advantages are on the higher side than the drawbacks of this issue. In this essay, I’ll explain my views.
To commence with, we have to admit that many students are relying on their parents’ funds so if they can start a business, they will earn money by themselves and own their economy. They will be able to pay things such as tuition fees or books, meanwhile, this would decrease the financial support from family. This is extremely true for students, who has weak financial support. Furthermore, they will be aware of the value of money because they make it. Therefore, they will know how to use it wisely. To illustrate, my brother is a sophomore student and he is now joining a business project, and he can make money from it. He can pay for bills and fees at school.
Secondly, creating a business when students are young can improve creativity and be a strong background to develop career in the future. Business involves many skills such as teamwork, and problem-solving skills, through those activities can help students progress significant skills, and intelligence because they have to use brain work a lot. Besides, creating business even helps them navigate or find their interests. In addition, they will be prepared for the future, so that when they grow up, and work in purchasing or selling fields, they won’t be confused and already have essential cornerstones.
To sum up, I think students should start up businesses due to its benefits that they would be able to control their economy and they will have a foundation for jobs in the future.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, while, i think, in addition, such as, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 24.0651302605 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1467.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84158415842 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67497806159 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561056105611 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 5.43587174349 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5044436262 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.6875 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9375 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8125 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281185365902 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0927651771778 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595197497746 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179981053613 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0825440254167 0.056905535591 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, while, i think, in addition, such as, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 24.0651302605 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1467.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84158415842 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67497806159 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561056105611 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 5.43587174349 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5044436262 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.6875 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9375 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8125 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281185365902 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0927651771778 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595197497746 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179981053613 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0825440254167 0.056905535591 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.