In some places, teenagers are encouraged to get part-time jobs while they are still in school. Do the advantages of teenagers working outweigh the disavantages?
It is ague that is it good for students to work part-time jobs while still in school. In my opinion, I believe that the benefits of this doesn’t outweigh the drawbacks for several reasons. In this essay, I’ll point out both sides to show my opinion.
First of all, I admit that getting a part-time job can create student’s income. For example, a university student has to pay for lots of things. It is essential to have a strong financial support, but they can’t just rely on their parent’s money. Therefore, working can help them own their personal economy and be able to afford for things. One more point is that part-time jobs also help enhance student’s social skills such as critical thinking, communication skills. They will meet many new people, they can learn a lot from the outside school life. This develops student’s problem solving skills because they have to face and solve challenges during working.
On the other hand, part-time jobs may disturb students from their studies. When they devote time for it, they won’t have much time for studying, they cannot balance between education and working. Consequently, their productivity and quality are decreased. In addition, jobs can cause stress, anxiety or sleeplessness while students are still too young to suffer from. Their mental and physical health will be affected in a bad way. They may be in risk while doing jobs without security. For instance, my sister used to work as a assistant while studying at university and she said her job hadn’t been always well because she had to deal with a lot issues and she was overload, that greatly affected their education at school.
To conclude, I think accepting a part-time job is a good way to help you earn money and complete soft skills while in schools but compared to disadvantages, it actually risky to work or be responsible for a job that you aren’t ready for.
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Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, if, may, so, still, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, such as, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1586.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91021671827 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61798711799 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585139318885 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 5.43587174349 313% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.5897527924 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.1111111111 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9444444444 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9444444444 7.06120827912 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249495295178 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0851807993104 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0801644551705 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164871318687 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0228298431389 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 50.2224549098 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.