In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

It is true that the number of overweight people is getting more and more. This tendency can be explained by some reasons and also solved by a lot of solutions.
There are several reasons why diabetes is on the increase which significantly affects to people’s health. The first factor is the popularity of fast food. It is true that junk food is becoming an integral part of numerous people, who easily overindulge themselves by processed food due to its convenience and tasty flavor. As a result, the amount of fat and sugar existing in the body will cause some disorders of substances and various chronic diseases such as high blood pressure, heart attack. The lack of physical exercises as a result of modern lifestyle can be considered another factor. In fact, people often use cars to travel instead of walking or cycling. They also spend a lot of time sitting in front of the TV rather than doing gym or jogging. As a consequence, some people have to cope with overweight together with an unbalanced appearance.
The government can undergo some measurements to mitigate this tendency. The first solution is that the government can produce a policy to raise the tax on sugar and fast food. This policy will directly increase citizen’s expense on these kinds of unhealthy food and makes them reduce their consumption of unhealthy food. Moreover, the government should focus on educating people about overweight’s effects and encourage the public to change their habits. For example, the local authority can organize some cycling or running contests to promote the benefits of physical exercise in keeping body shape
In conclusion, there are various reasons explaining why people are increasingly getting diabetes and some solution can be done to tackle this trend

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, so, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1495.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1023890785 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84667827672 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580204778157 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.7639802334 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6666666667 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5333333333 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154345106901 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0482261184913 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0334768189909 0.0667982634062 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.09862758734 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00345703077996 0.056905535591 6% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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