Some countries encourage teenagers to have part-time jobs and see it as a good thing, while others disagree.
Give your opinion and discuss both views.
In some countries there are significant opportunities for the students to stay busy in doing part-time jobs while others do not have. Although there are some disadvantages in doing part-time jobs, I believe that students will get more benefits, and therefore, doing part-time jobs should be encouraged.
Doing part-time jobs causes some problems. It kills students’ study time. Students will want to stay busy whole day in part-time jobs as this can be a significant source of income. As a result, they will lose concentration from their study and fail school exam. Besides, part-time jobs have negative impact on a country’s people’s education level. Many students in western countries do not want to continue their study after passing high school exam as they become very busy in part-time jobs and consider these jobs as their life-time jobs.
However, benefits of doing part-time jobs are enormous compared to the disadvantages. Students can afford their day-to-day expenses by doing part-time jobs. Not only can they afford daily expenses, but they can also afford a large proportion of their university fees which are easing day by day. As a result, there will be less burden on their parents. There are also other benefits relating to the skills they gain from part-time jobs. From part-time jobs, students can get valuable skills, for example, presentation skills, managing skills and team-working skills, which will be significant assets when they will find corporate jobs. These skills will keep them ahead of many competitors in job interview.
To conclude, although part-time jobs have some negative impacts on students’ study, the benefits are huge, and therefore, I believe that doing part-time jobs should be encouraged.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 354, Rule ID: ALSO_OTHER[1]
Message: Use simply 'there are other' or 'there are also'
Suggestion: There are other; There are also
...e will be less burden on their parents. There are also other benefits relating to the skills they ga...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, so, therefore, while, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1491.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40217391304 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86338037553 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 176.041082164 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478260869565 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 446.4 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.1619698032 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.1875 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.25 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9375 7.06120827912 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228686772429 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107801950089 0.084324248473 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0828388102255 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190530063433 0.151304729494 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058325077076 0.056905535591 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.74 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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