In some cultures, children are encouraged to compete against each other. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this approach?
Promoting competitive environment between children and their peers has been commonplace in few cultures. This issue will cite significant merits and demerits which will be elaborated in the forthcoming paragraph.
On the one hand, custom and tradition supporting the children to compete among their fellows believe that it could highly nurture excellent leadership qualities. In other words, the strict upbringing ultimately shapes the way of thinking to become the best one in every field as they are being used to taking a prominent role surrounding during childhood. In addition, the harder the generation to achieve their goals is, the bolder their characteristic will be. This probably gives impactful influence to build better future in which some popular universities may point such youth as consideration.
On the other hand, the reasonable drawback of this means to lose their childhood, knowing the fact that this badly impacts not only psychology side but sympathy characteristic also. Apparently, golden stage is the perfect time to learn social skills such as spending their time playing among same fellows. Furthermore, this norm will probably affects academic value, since they will put it the first priority instead of its process - procuring knowledge. This is because they believe the appraisal surroundings is the only way to get success. In worst case, becoming self-centered and officious is their conceit rather than being a sagacious individual.
In conclusion, the positive views of encouraging adolescent to always win over their peers provide them to be a promising leader and great accomplishment. However, the negatives of this measurability including appropriate childhood experiences as well as the ferociously competitive academic score should be taken into account.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'affect'
Suggestion: affect
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Line 5, column 544, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'In the worst'.
Suggestion: In the worst
...undings is the only way to get success. In worst case, becoming self-centered and offici...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, well, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1533.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.61538461538 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02892664346 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.666666666667 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.4142929976 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.923076923 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.7692307692 7.06120827912 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115771989129 0.244688304435 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0388666823135 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0287363727691 0.0667982634062 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0678826282813 0.151304729494 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0156759709247 0.056905535591 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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