In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
In the modern-day, some parts of different cultures in this world have told their children that accomplishing comes when they try hard sufficient. In the following paragraphs, both benefits and drawbacks will be discussed in detail.
The main advantages of this cultural principle are that those youths will become a successful person faster than before, and its belief will also increase their confidence in doing a hard assignment, despite tiredness from overworking. Elon Musk is one of the prime examples in this statement since he had mentioned to the correspondent about his daily life that he works at least ten hours per day for balancing and enhancing his ability every day, and therefore he had completed all of the goals that he had dreamed of doing.
On the other hand, it can be seen that this belief has been affecting all children these days with the negative consequences in many aspects, especially in releasing stress issue. It can be seen that many teenagers nowadays have pressured by surroundings, such as many intense competitions, which are emerged because everyone wants to achieve their goals and try their best. Moreover, many of those children spend their time just focusing or working, regardless of communicating with each other around them about their life in order to release their stress. Thus, those children will be struggled with their tiredness without taking care of themselves.
In conclusion, the belief that working hard can achieve their goals can aid those children to become successful and confident, although they can get stressed at the same time if they do not deal with the tiredness.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 482, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ery day, and therefore he had completed all of the goals that he had dreamed of doing. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, at least, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1376.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15355805243 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73434917379 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610486891386 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 408.6 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.7161963255 49.4020404114 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.888888889 106.682146367 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6666666667 20.7667163134 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2222222222 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226267948007 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10161340124 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100906997905 0.0667982634062 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163105836228 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0852541572083 0.056905535591 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 13.0946893788 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 50.2224549098 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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