In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
Many people believe that children are considered to be the future of humanity, so that they often teach them to try the best in order to gain more achievements. However, some others argue that this idea can lead children to under pressure. In this essay, I will give more evidences about the benefits and drawbacks of this common opinion.
First of all, we know that when we ask our children to strive themselves for anything, we have motivated them a lot, especially belonging to psychological field. For instance, in the growth stage of children in some Asian countries, their parents normally encourage them to learn words as many as possible. If they can do better than others, these parents will proud of them, and even give them many presents. In addition, with the example I have mentioned, this encouraging idea generally take a shape of competition between children in the upcoming future.
In contrast, asking a child try harder may make them overwhelming. In fact, a large number of Korean students have committed suicide because of studying stress. This figure has still rose rapidly until now. The reason is that they were afraid of failure. Another example is that the same situation has happened with Japanese due to work hardest and can’t find any ideal of life. To be extended, the more afraid they have, the lack of equal in competition they do. As the result, many people chose “dark path” in their career because they desire a happy life in the material world when they were young. By that reason, they will make the statement of trying hardest with others.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Suggestion: many; numerous
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Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'risen'.
Suggestion: risen
... studying stress. This figure has still rose rapidly until now. The reason is that t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, so, still, for instance, in addition, in contrast, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1317.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85977859779 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4889839126 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.60147601476 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 411.3 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2794403767 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0666666667 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46666666667 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271327472338 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0876031018889 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503065238019 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19112169994 0.151304729494 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0513706191993 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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