In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
Most often than not, families impose their own unfulfilled dreams on their children, fueling them with ambitions and the promise of riches and the prestige that could be obtained if they just worked hard enough. This method of upbrining could yield both positive and negative results, as it might play a part in motivating children, building their confidence and teaching them about the values of hard work. However, at the same time, it may lead to wishful thinking, perfectionism, and consequently depression.
The more optimistic view would be to consider the advantages: when told about the likelihood of great achivements, children assume that they have the potential to pursue anything they desire. This, in turn, would help raise their self-steam, which would come handy later in their life, as ‘believing in oneself’ is an essential quality for adults to possess. Furthermore, the emphasis on the fact that dreams could only be attained by putting in a substantial amount of effort, would help children realize that adulthood is not easy, and the actualization of ambitions requires working tirelessly. Considering that multiple advertisments may try to push the idea that quick success is possible for everyone, it is of utmost importance to educate children on this critical fact that the way to success is to strive for it.
Although these results are mostly positive, the disadvantages should not be neglected. If the emphasis is on the ‘reaching all your dreams’ part, instead of the ‘hard work’ part, it could very well feed into wishful thinking tendecies of children, and result into the shaping of a passive character who fancies being in high places, yet never lifts a finger to do a thing. Living this form of fantasy life could be considered as a root for perfectionism, which is regarded as a dysfunctional trait. To elaborate, perfectionism could lead to a destructive form of procrastinating, in which the person never gets productive, because they are fantasizing about the perfect opportunity, or the perfect time, or other perfections that do not exist. This constant state of desiring to be great but not taking any steps towards the goal takes its toll on any human being, making them feel miserable about themselves, filled with self-doubt and a sense of guilt, which might evantually result in depression. All of this may have been avoided, if instead of exposing the children to the ‘fantasy’ of countless opportunities, they had been lectured on the hardships and actual limitations of the real world.
In conclusion, it is not necessarily a bad practice to invoke the ideas of ambitious pursuits in children. However, this must be done with extreme caution, as to avoid putting a burden on the child that they might go on to carry with themselves into their adulthood.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, may, so, well, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 41.998997996 160% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2362.0 1615.20841683 146% => OK
No of words: 461.0 315.596192385 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12364425163 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95438633312 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 176.041082164 145% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555314533623 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 704.7 506.74238477 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.2122359727 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.466666667 106.682146367 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.7333333333 20.7667163134 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213510797286 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0700777561462 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0546997569897 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132242727951 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0263999636838 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.0946893788 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 50.2224549098 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.01 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 78.4519038076 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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