In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message
In many countries, adults often instill a message for children that everything can be acquired as long as people put enough effort on it. This saying contains both pros and cons, however, personally, I believe that the benefits of this statement are much greater than the negativities
On the one hand, telling kids to have the determination for everything is significantly motivated, reinforcing many decent characteristics of them. In detail, children usually tend to change their interests rapidly, for example, a kid may be once really into piano, he can soon give up on it since he finds it so difficult to play. Thus, an advice as being patient enough can help you reach every goal is immensely beneficial for them. In addition, this can be the core element to build up a good characteristic and perspective that they should always stick to their guns or never feel afraid of a particular challenge that they have to cope with in the future. As a result, delivering the mentioned message to pupils can not only help them not to give up early but also create good manners which are really essential when they grow up
On the other hand, there are also a few drawbacks related to this statement, involving in a misconception that they can do everything they want, even if they are either impratical or inappropriate. In fact, there is a certain extent of things that people can not obtain, such as fictional products or governmental properties, which children may not know it is impossible to possess but keep insisting to have. Therefore, this saying can happen to create a greater ambition among kids towards things that are not realistic or possibly belonged to them. For instance, although a mother have refused for so many times that her child can not buy this dollhouse, instead of understanding, that kid still keeps persuading her mother to buy it since she was taught that if she tries hard enough, everything can be possible, which obviously spoils her
To conclude, it is really meaningful to show children the importance of doing everything with their best. Although it may carry some shortcomings to the kids, I strongly believe that people should highly value and focus on its advantages more since it helps the children to be more determined with everything and have the motivations to follow their dreams
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 339, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'advice'.
Suggestion: advice
...he finds it so difficult to play. Thus, an advice as being patient enough can help you re...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, really, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 50.0 24.0651302605 208% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1941.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 395.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91392405063 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81324493419 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541772151899 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 20.2975951904 192% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.7496174135 49.4020404114 192% => OK
Chars per sentence: 194.1 106.682146367 182% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.5 20.7667163134 190% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.3 7.06120827912 217% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263660790759 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100508440286 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0519920495328 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155208955247 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368079563546 0.056905535591 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.4 13.0946893788 163% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.35 50.2224549098 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 11.3001002004 153% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.79 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 9.78957915832 199% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.6 10.1190380762 174% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.7795591182 167% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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