Some educationalists argue that non-exam art-based subjects, such as music, drama, art and craft, should be compulsory in the secondary-school curriculum. They believe that activities such as these can improve overall academic performance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Overwhelming of majority of people think that are-based subjects are less important in comparison with scientific academic courses. While, educational experts believe that these sort of courses should be obligatory. I agree to this idea for couple of reason.
The most important thing that should be stuck in mind, is about the effect of are on students’ mind. A great deal of psychological research has been done to prove the impact of art on people character. The results have indicated that engaging in art can reduce the stress in human body. According to this, some psychologist, recommend to be involved in some artistic stuff to relief daily stress. Playing music, painting, creating hand-made subject such as sculpture, will impact peoples’ mood positively and result in improving their spirit. Also, since creating art needs to be innovative, students will learn to think widely and consider all aspects, which will help them to be more concentrate on their technical and especial courses.
On the other hand, one of the required skills for students, is being able to work within a team. I think, most of the art-based activities in schools should be done by a team. As an outstanding instance, I can mentioned school orchestra performance which any students play their own instrument. Another example, is theater that performed by a team as cost under vision of director. Student will learn to obey the leader or manager and, also, be a member of team. Experiences have obviously shown, that those students who were engaged in these group of activities, are more flexible at university and even at work. They can play their role as a member of team more efficiently.
As a conclusion, in my idea, art-based subjects are very effective, and they should be compulsory in schools curriculum. These kind of courses are able to influence student spirit and creativeness. Also, students will learn how to work in team-working projects
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Message: Did you mean 'this sort' or 'these nulls'?
Suggestion: this sort; these nulls
...While, educational experts believe that these sort of courses should be obligatory. I agre...
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommend being'.
Suggestion: recommend being
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Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'mention'
Suggestion: mention
...team. As an outstanding instance, I can mentioned school orchestra performance which any ...
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Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
...ld be compulsory in schools curriculum. These kind of courses are able to influence studen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, while, i think, kind of, of course, sort of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1641.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14420062696 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88482678978 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586206896552 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.7230808324 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.3684210526 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7894736842 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47368421053 7.06120827912 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22666655147 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688691622306 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707741875527 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137840042854 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.026876324925 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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