It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent to you agree or disagree?
History is considered as an essential part of curriculum in many schools, because of many benefits that are associated with this course. Whether local history should be the first priority of foreign history, is became a frequent subject of debate. While many people believe in higher importance of local history, in my idea, the international history is as important as domestic history, and student should place enough emphasis on both of them.
First of all, there is no doubt that learning about our ancestors and our previous generation play a vital role in upbringing young generations, helping them to raise their knowledge and broaden their horizons. These advantages would be doubled if the history course covered both domestic and international events. Imagine those students who live in less-developed countries studying about the industrial revolution in European countries, how much either new ideas or incentives are provide with them. Secondly, as we are living in a global village, learning about traditions, values, and legacy of not only the people of our country but also other nations, make a significant contribution to promoting a sense of cohesion among citizens of a variety of cultures. This situation might result in more cooperation and multinational events. For example, those international historical celebrities which are held among neighbors countries, to relive their common values.
Admittedly, it is true to say that domestic history may be more important than other nation’s one, but if we take the view that students are able to benefit from studying widespread history , it is logical to suggest both internal and external history are same as each other in terms of importance.
In conclusion, from my personal viewpoint, the role that both domestic and foreign history play in widen students' horizons is hard to be ignored and both of them should be received equal attention.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: become
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1621.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33223684211 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89145382819 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585526315789 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.6235259865 49.4020404114 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.363636364 106.682146367 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6363636364 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7272727273 7.06120827912 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211927515375 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0751894378901 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0505195762979 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127752015522 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573004270778 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.7 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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