Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go Write a letter to the head teacher In your letter Say why you would like to go on the trip Suggest what

Essay topics:

Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.
Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:
• Say why you would like to go on the trip
• Suggest what you could do to help during the trip
• Ask other questions about the trip

Dear Mrs. Rezaee,
I am writing in response to your inquiry about next week's school trip and I want to inform you about my tendency for accompanying the group. Also, asking you for some more complementary information.

To begin with, as you my know it is the first school trip for my son which he is so excited about. He got cold last week and still does not feel well, and this triggers me to decide to come with you in case he needs some assistance.

With regard to my assistance during the trip, I have to say that I have a health-care certificate and also, hands-on experiences about mountain climbing. I guess the role of the assistance is hard to ignore, especially when it comes to children’s programs.

I wonder if you could provide me more details about the program such as the exact time and date, the accommodation place, and the number of children. I hope my request will not inconvenience you too much.
Yours Sincerely,
Yalda Asgari.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Mrs. Rezaee, I am writing in response to your inquiry...
^^^
Line 8, column 151, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...tion place, and the number of children. I hope my request will not inconvenience ...
^
Line 9, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...venience you too much. Yours Sincerely, Yalda Asgari.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so, still, well, i guess, such as, to begin with, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 795.0 937.175257732 85% => OK
No of words: 170.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67647058824 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73529411765 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 127.690721649 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.652941176471 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 242.1 290.88556701 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3159020589 44.8134815571 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3333333333 76.5299724578 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8888888889 16.8248392259 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 4.34317383033 207% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14678439341 0.216113520407 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.055133420348 0.0766984524023 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440862327696 0.0603063233224 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0851841588839 0.12726935374 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425336641373 0.0580467560999 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 8.37731958763 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 70.7449484536 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 7.45979381443 106% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 8.71597938144 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 41.2886597938 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.