Some educationalists argue that non-exam, art-based subjects, such as music, drama, art and craft, should be compulsory in the secondary-school curriculum. They believe that activities such as these can improve overall academic performance. To what extent

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Some educationalists argue that non-exam, art-based subjects, such as music, drama, art and craft, should be compulsory in the secondary-school curriculum. They believe that activities such as these can improve overall academic performance. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

Nowadays, it is true many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines. I completely agree that it gives more positive rather than negative for same reasons.

In the one hand, the advantage of this issue is can speed up work and not waste a lot of time. it is because for work using the machine we just need to determine the time of work. For example, in todays present many people who use washing machines, the washing machine just need to be set how much tasting after it will automatically throw away and fill the water itself and in some time the clothes are finished and just need in the gender in a short time. As a result, clothes faster dy an just take a short time.

And on one side again, the disadvantage of this issue is the body will be less rarely moving. it is due to now just need to play the button and machine will be path by it self. Like an example, usually we wash it by hand, after using the machine we only press a button nd the machine will run on it is own. And the result, hands will be more often sick when we are too much to move.

In my opinion we should be able to balance the work we can do alone and work done by the machine, because our body needs to move a lot to make our muscles not too stiff.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, for example, as a result, in my opinion, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1027.0 1615.20841683 64% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.05928853755 5.12529762239 79% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.02451812144 2.80592935109 72% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 176.041082164 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505928853755 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 340.2 506.74238477 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.60771543086 81% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9264845253 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3636363636 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.81818181818 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0471239304539 0.244688304435 19% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0201118216912 0.084324248473 24% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0168600061201 0.0667982634062 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0333137291055 0.151304729494 22% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00892713235562 0.056905535591 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 13.0946893788 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 50.2224549098 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.56 12.4159519038 53% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.59 8.58950901804 77% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 78.4519038076 37% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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