Some educationalists say that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
In my view, playing an instrument is an advantage of all ages. some educationalists say that every child should be taught to play a musical instrument. I personally completely agree with this statement because of its benefits.
One of the benefits that brings for children is that patience. patience is a necessary virtue on the road to success. learning any instrument is very difficult, it requires patience and practice hard. Particularly, when learning a musical instrument, children not only learn about how to play but also learn about the culture where that instrument was born. there are lots of knowledge to be learned so children will be taught slowly and for a long time. Clearly, they must learn seriously and practice day by day. As a result, this builds patience for children in both learning musical instrument and other things in life.
Last but not least, playing instruments helps children to release stress and pressure when they are tension. I think that some students or people have an emotional problem. In other words, there will definitely be times when you are sad and depressed. At this moment, playing a musical instrument is a good way to release unhappy or stress. For example, when students get stressed from school, instead of playing video games or watching TV, they play a favorite musical instrument. this helps their body and mind be flexible, then they will feel comfortable and no longer stressed. Thus, playing a favorite instrument is a good way to release stressed.
In conclusion, there are a lot advantages of playing musical instrument such as learning patience, relieving stress. so, I personally think that parents should encourage their children at young age to learn playing an instrument. encourage their children at a young age to learn to play an instrument.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, thus, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my view, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1523.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09364548495 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79961678855 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518394648829 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 449.1 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.979807264 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.15 106.682146367 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.95 20.7667163134 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305925468032 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103409462462 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122280565741 0.0667982634062 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222653166679 0.151304729494 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144961294921 0.056905535591 255% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 50.2224549098 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.65 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.58950901804 82% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 78.4519038076 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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