In the day and age, many parents wonder if their children should be involved in playing musical instruments or focus on academic subjects at school. From my perspective, the benefits of playing a musical instrument outweigh those of studying science subjects.
On the one hand, there are many positive effects of taking part in music classes. Firstly, it can improve children's different soft skills because music trains their patience and concentration. This equips children with the necessary skills which can later be transferred into their personal lives, and result in career advancement. Moreover, learning music can help relieve stress and improve mood and emotions, results in a more positive life. For example, the children who engage in music lessons can have more time for themselves, understand themselves better and boost academic performance. Furthermore, beside those mentioned benefits, participating in music lessons can also stimulate the development of both brain hemispheres, leads to the fact that it could enhance creativity and helps kids grow up comprehensively. For instance, music will help children progress their imagination and artistic ability such as art, sculpture, literature or painting.
On the other hand, concentrating on academic subjects at school also plays a vital role. One of the major benefits of studying science subjects is that it equips kids with adequate knowledge and is also advantageous for future career as well. This helps them to get more employment opportunities and can find a higher salary occupation in such competitive market.
Taking everything into consideration, this reinforces my point of view that both joining in a music lesson and studying academic subjects are all advantageous in there own ways. I honestly hope that every children can choose compatible way, depending on their situation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'their own'?
Suggestion: their own
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, honestly, if, moreover, so, well, for example, for instance, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1581.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52797202797 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97627216494 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597902097902 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8960043126 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.928571429 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4285714286 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.71428571429 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109016959535 0.244688304435 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0428335901886 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0420495655482 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0789498381758 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0663873118693 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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