Some educators believe that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Some educators believe that every child should be taught how to play a musical
instrument. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, parents pay more attention to their offspring’s innate ability, as well as invest more on other skills of their child besides forcing them to learn core subjects at school. Some opinions hold that youngster should all know how to play at least one musical instrument. Personally, I totally agree with this statement since the merits that this tendency brings back are significant.

To commence with, it has long been shown by scientists that music creates relaxation, which benefits human emotions. Therefore, young children can play an instrument as a leisure activity to reduce stress from school works, as well as to boost their parents’ mood after a long day at work. Piano, for example, is a classic instrument which creates beautiful sounds that can ease mental pain and erase negative thoughts. As a result, not only the juvenile themselves but also their parents could generate positive feelings every day.

Furthermore, learning to play an instrument could develop the IQ rate of a child, which then bring about positive effects to their lives. If small children know how to play an instrument from an early age, they could perform better at school and gain high marks more frequently. Therefore, those kids are often more successful when come to life, and tend to get promotion at a young age. For instance, famous musicians such as Mozart or Beethoven are all well-known for their talent, and they both gain numerous of success during their career.

In conclusion, I believe that juveniles should learn how to play an instrument since it might help them to generate more positive feelings and could even enhance their intelligence.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 159, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to core'
Suggestion: to core
...eir child besides forcing them to learn core subjects at school. Some opinions hold ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, if, so, then, therefore, well, as to, at least, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1396.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13235294118 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61515702784 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.639705882353 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 413.1 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.285472318 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 116.333333333 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.9166666667 7.06120827912 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158730296578 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0630791435534 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652305095535 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109261312952 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362370756036 0.056905535591 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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