some people believe that culture will be ruined if it used to earn tourism revenue, but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting a culture. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
In recent years, it is thought that earning money by tourism industry will destroy the culture because of importing of other cultures and changing the mind of local people . However, many people believe that tourists is a affective way to protect as well as conserve the culture in each country by advertisement. In my case, the second comment is definitely correct
Practically, due to the development of tourism industry in many countries, traveling abroad had been becoming easier. Therefore that is the most reason why gradually there were ample amount of new cultures were imported. For instance, bikini or nude culture in western totally affects the traditional culture of Vietnam. Nowadays, facing with the modern life, most people changed their thinking considerably about many aspects like a consumerism that K-pop or Korean style particularly fashion are the most common trend especially in Vietnamese teenagers.
On the other hand, others think that tourism is the best way to protect culture because most foreigners prefer to experience the local cultures and share their memories to their friends or family when they travel to a new country; so it is a chance for government to advertise their culture through news or social media. Furthermore, tourists also discover or research about some old culture, which is in the past, even many local young people do not know.
In conclusion, the tourism industry loses the characteristics of each culture; conversely, it also brings plenty of benefits. Therefore, not only government but also each individual must have responsibility on protecting and conserving their own cultures.
- The chart below shows the amount of time that 10 to 15-year-olds spend chatting on the Internet and playing on games consoles on an average school day in the UK. 61
- people tend to work longer hours nowadays. Working long hours has a negative effect on themselves, their families and society, so working hours should be restricted. Do you agree or disagree? 73
- The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 73
- Fashion trend are difficult to follow. Some people think that they primarily exist fust to sell clothes so we should not follow them. To what extent do you agree with this opinion? 67
- Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. 78
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, furthermore, however, if, second, so, therefore, well, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1387.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35521235521 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85102234337 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.617760617761 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.5876149118 49.4020404114 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.7 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.6 7.06120827912 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237796638219 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901311882487 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611802293053 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147035368317 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0661136206132 0.056905535591 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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