Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos, while others think that zoos are both entertaining and ecologically important.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Our environment is now being polluted due to the consequence of the world’s imprecise industrialization which affects the habitat and animals significantly. Therefore, some people think that keeping species in zoo is a brilliant idea while the others show the opposite initiative. This thesis will deliberate both points of view but eventually acquiesces in the intents of the benefits of zoos.
First of all, it is indubitable that zoos have played a crucial role in wildlife conservation. For example, they protect endangered animals from the eyes of illegal poachers, predators, malnourishment and habitat loss by bringing them into an innocuous milieu where they are taken after carefully by zookeepers. Moreover, zoos are also the educating and fascinating destination for not only children but also adults who tremendously enjoy ascertaining animals directly. Visiting zoos, in addition, have become a tradition activity for family.
On the other hand, there are also other arguments that specifically against zoos because they cogitate that zoos are artificial environments, and if keeping animals in zoos accomplishes education or entertainment purpose, no matter how advantageous that intents are, they are still primarily focus on the revenue but not the animal’s rights. Animals in zoos usually lack of their survival skills in the natural world, consequently, they will suffer from physical and mental stress and no longer be able to survive in the wild.
In conclusion, I personally appreciate the advantage of zoos, as long as the principal objective is to mainly concentrate on the animal’s welfare instead of the economic purpose, zoos are beneficial. Moreover, I passionately believe that there are other humanitarian ways to observe animals apart from zoos such as in the sanctuary where does not exhibit animals, but in fact rescues and takes good care of incapacitated animals.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 20, Rule ID: ALSO_OTHER[1]
Message: Use simply 'there are other' or 'there are also'
Suggestion: there are other; there are also
...ivity for family. On the other hand, there are also other arguments that specifically against zoo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, while, apart from, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1630.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54421768707 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17488903799 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62925170068 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.1974573916 49.4020404114 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.181818182 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7272727273 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.0909090909 7.06120827912 228% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248704158806 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0849519723287 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0678940367171 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144524579076 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0677792308473 0.056905535591 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 50.2224549098 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.15 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.08 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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