Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is to a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There are many ways to be successful in occupation. Some students think that they should pursuit their education at university or college for a good future job, whilst getting a job straight after school is more effective option for some. I find the former more convincing for some reasons. Both views will be discussed in this essay and my opinion will be clarified as well.
It is clear that attending university is beneficial for students. Inevitably, high school students are not mature enough to get a job in today’s competitive working world. They haven’t experienced a lot, so they lack working experience as well as many essential skills required by employers. At university, students are provided with not only theory but also practice courses. Therefore, they can have in-depth knowledge about their career and gain their working skills through classroom activities like doing presentations, group work, discussing, doing projects, doing surveys, and communicating with others. Also, students can get used to working environment and enrich their experience by having internships, which perfects their curriculum vitae. All these things help students more easily get and do their future jobs.
On the other hand, getting a job right away after high school has its benefits. To be more specific, students can shorten their path to success by not wasting four years at university. They can take use of that time period to do many things or jobs they like, and get valuable experience from real working environment. However, they may have many difficulties when they experience the job themselves at that young age without any help from a university or college. It seems they lose more than get. In fact, they spend hard time full of ups and downs before they reach their goal. In addition, the options to choose jobs is fewer for those who don’t have academic qualifications because many jobs require relevant degrees like doctors, professors, teachers, lawyers, police officers, etc.
In conclusion, every different person has different way to succeed but I do believe that everyone should continue to study after school to prepare well for upcoming jobs and reduce difficulties on the way to success.

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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 793, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...teachers, lawyers, police officers, etc. In conclusion, every different person ha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1872.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 358.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22905027933 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76687504519 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597765363128 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.1617288567 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5263157895 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8421052632 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.10526315789 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177901915684 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543539813735 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0579363692349 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128674305385 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0713527237751 0.056905535591 125% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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