Some people believe that violent media directly results in violent behavior. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is argued by some people that behaviors which have attribute of violence are the consequence of directly-exposure to violent media. In my opinion, I partly agree with this point of view for some following reasons in this essay.
On the one hand, watching violent movies or playing video games related to fighting will affect people’s mental health. Indeed, when people exposure to films related to violent content with the high frequency, it is likely that their mental health would be affected by those scenes, and they might imitate it in their real world, resulting even the worst case which is having bad behavior with other people. Taking a real and famous case of Le Van Luyen as an example, he was caught to prison due to killing a family to gain money for playing violent game.
On the other hand, it is hardly to say that violent media is the root cause for violent behavior because it still exists another factors contributing to that negative behavior such as family background. Obviously, if a child lives in a house where he always has to watch his parents fighting or arguing, he might be negatively affected and easily to become a violent person in the future because of the fact that children easily imitate their parents’ behavior.
In conclusion, accessing to violent content via media has a negative impact on the users, leading to violent behavior. However, there are also another factors contributing to this consequence besides direct exposure to the violent media. Therefore, it is necessary for people to limit the time of watching or reading such content.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 55, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'attributed'.
Suggestion: attributed
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Line 3, column 388, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...o become a violent person in the future because of the fact that children easily imitate their parents’ ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, so, still, therefore, as to, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1325.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94402985075 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59522100934 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563432835821 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 415.8 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.2292112477 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.5 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8 7.06120827912 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313297742897 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137595078428 0.084324248473 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0872861505936 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205763643051 0.151304729494 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518650009878 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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