Some people believe that women should play an equal role as men in a country’s police force or military force, while others think women are not suitable for these kinds of jobs.
Discuss both views and give your opinion?
In generally, I quite agree that most of women nowadays are not suitable to participate in military force or some kind of that but not all of them. I also don’t believe that police force or military force is the only thing that women should involve to. Except becoming a soldier or a police officer, women can also do other jobs that more capable for themself.
To suppose my first opinion, I think women can join military or police force. Although their health, strength and endurance are not good as well as men, their intelligence and their patient is better than men very much. Beside that, women is more careful than men. Especially is doing jobs that use paper and pen. However, I can’t deny that these kind of jobs are better for men instead of women. When someone join the police for instance to become a soldier, they mostly will have to train a lot of their fitness so that they can catch and control the criminal faster and more simple. And to take part in military, the people greatly needs a better health that may impossible to reach so that they can go to the battle field, ride on a helicopter or a tank and fight against the enemies to protect the country.
To explain my second view, it is unnecessary that women should play a role as a soldier as men. As I have mentioned before, because of their bad health, most of women shouldn’t protect their hometown by becoming a guardian. Instead of that, they can do many kind of different jobs such as an employee, a reporter, a doctor and so on.
To conclude, I agree that there are still some women that can play an equal role as man if they are good enough to do that thing. I also believe that there’s no need for women to become a soldier or a police officer. They can do many jobs else that simple but bring them a good salary to take care of their family.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 34, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the women') or simply say ''most women''.
Suggestion: most of the women; most women
In generally, I quite agree that most of women nowadays are not suitable to participat...
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Line 2, column 341, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...per and pen. However, I can’t deny that these kind of jobs are better for men instead of w...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 410, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'joins'.
Suggestion: joins
... for men instead of women. When someone join the police for instance to become a sol...
^^^^
Line 3, column 154, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the women') or simply say ''most women''.
Suggestion: most of the women; most women
...ed before, because of their bad health, most of women shouldn’t protect their hometown by bec...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 254, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun kind seems to be countable; consider using: 'many kinds'.
Suggestion: many kinds
... guardian. Instead of that, they can do many kind of different jobs such as an employee, ...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, well, for instance, i think, in general, kind of, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 7.30460921844 260% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 44.0 24.0651302605 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1497.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.39002932551 5.12529762239 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26873360209 2.80592935109 81% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492668621701 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 479.7 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4476003217 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5625 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3125 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344502981727 0.244688304435 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127846741454 0.084324248473 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0889438141163 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227974636706 0.151304729494 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0814594553208 0.056905535591 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 50.2224549098 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 12.4159519038 66% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.76 8.58950901804 79% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 78.4519038076 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.