Some people say that art subjects such as music, drama and creative writing are an essential part of education, and every school should include them in its syllabus. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and examples from your own experience.
Today most parents tend that their children acquire extra-curricular activities, e.g. Painting, drawing, music, drama and etc., than spending their spare time in the school for learning more. While some other believe that it could be better children educate these extra skill after school, some others think student should attend more on their lessens during the school years. From my standpoint, not only should this notion, learning more skill during the school, be underscore, but also some class times and syllabi are better to be allotted to this matter.
Almost there could not be a shadow of doubt that children gaining more knowledge in school have better future than their peers. While learning art-related activities, student could improve zeroing in on their lessens. Moreover, so utilitarian is acquiring these activities that they could enhance the self-esteem of the student. Then, student would avail themselves of learning these extra activities and even these courses could open new avenues for student they would not have otherwise had.
On the other hand, some other parents believe learning extra-curricular activities is not necessary during the school years. In this case, student should just attend to school and do their homework as well as spend their spare time by TV, do physical exertions, namely going to gymnasium, or do mental ones. These parent are of the opinion that their children would acquire art subject after graduating from school.
To recapitulate briefly, while some parent insist that their offspring are consigned to an institution to learn art subjects, some other parents think it is no use sending their children to such classes. I absolutely go along with the former group.
- The bar chart shows the expectation to change of European young people in the next 20 years in 5 di erent areas 57
- The maps below show the changes in a town after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam 73
- The graph shows the monthly expenditure on three types of restaurant food in Australia The plot shows the annual number of restaurant visits for the same types of food between 1965 and 2015 100
- The chart below gives information about the growth of the urban population in certain parts of the world including the prediction of the future 73
- It is sometimes said that governments should dedicate a fixed proportion of their country s income to foreign aid each year and this fixed proportion should always be donated to other countries Opponents of this idea however say that aid should have no fi 55
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 119, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...s, e.g. Painting, drawing, music, drama and etc., than spending their spare time in the ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 113, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to art', 'to be'
Suggestion: to art; to be
...re consigned to an institution to learn art subjects, some other parents think it i...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, e.g., moreover, so, then, well, while, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1457.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31751824818 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53765136755 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547445255474 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2407398333 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.416666667 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130106159458 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564182174241 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0412201017399 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0922356854238 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0480933113068 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.