Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.
To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion
It is sometimes claimed that music is an effective measure for connecting people regardless of their races and ages. While I understand reasons why some oppose this idea, personally I strongly agree that music can bring people together, due to its ability to convey messages across borders and to preserve them through time.
For once, music can eradicate the cultural borders as music can express its meaning through rhythms and notes, making it understandable even to people who don’t speak the same language. My parents, for instance, despite not knowing any English, still have a deep passion for the 80s songs such as hits of Prince or rock songs of Queen. The main reason behind their love is that they can still sympathise and empathise with the feelings and spirits conveyed in these songs. Therefore, their fashion and thinking are partially impacted by the 80s trend in America. And most middle aged people in Vietnam like my parents, not understanding the language can not deter them from embracing with foreign cultures through songs.
Furthermore, thanks to the ability to perfectly preserve its content, music can serve as a mode to bring people in different generations together. Music, in every period of history, portrayed the lifestyle, spirits and hobbies of people living in the ages. Therefore, it is an interesting and vivid approach for the youth to understand the life of older generations, resulting in understanding and empathy between individuals. Take me as an example, in the past, I couldn’t understand many hobbies and mindsets of my grandparents. However, after hearing a few songs written in wartime, when my grandparents grew up, I was acknowledged about the hardship, the unyielding spirit and the passion to contribute to my grandparents, which subsequently made me appreciate them deeply. My story is a salient example on how greatly music can enhance people’s relationship.
To conclude, for the reasons outlined above, I strongly believe that music, with its magical capacity to convey and preserve its messages, can connect people, irrespective of their nationalities and ages.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, so, still, therefore, while, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1791.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26764705882 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89609419593 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579411764706 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2304012529 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.928571429 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2857142857 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78571428571 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180347198808 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0677319804884 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0613698096273 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115014391465 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518200150478 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, so, still, therefore, while, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1791.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26764705882 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89609419593 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579411764706 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2304012529 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.928571429 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2857142857 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78571428571 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180347198808 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0677319804884 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0613698096273 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115014391465 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518200150478 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.