Some people say that what children watch influences their behaviour. Others believe the amount of time they spend on television influences their behaviour most. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is an issue of controversy over children’s behaviour is influenced by television contents or long screen time. While a long time for watching TV exerts adverse impacts on behavior of children, I suppose that there are manifold downsides of harmful contents on television.
On the one hand, there is little room for doubt that disadvantages of watching TV too much time. Firstly, long television time deprives children of time for outdoor activities and sports. In lieu of spending time on physic exercises, they only become coach potatoes, which gives rise to an array of their health problems, such as diabetes and disorders of their eyes. Secondly, an excessive amount of screen time would pose a threat to youngsters’ fundamental social skills. Hence, when they encounter a personal adversity, it is an uphill task for them to deal with that, even they will have difficulties in communicating and expending their social circle.
On the other hand, television contents easily put young people’s development in jeopardy. There is a uncontrolled increase of bad image’s appearances on TV which are the culprit of disorders of children’s awareness and behavior. An explanation is that with cutting-edge technology, content creators have opportunities to post everything which contains the scenes of sex, violence, even crimination as long as they have a chance to make a profit. Not only that, but parents nowadays also tend to have longer working hours and spend little time taking care of their offsprings. As a result, vulnerable children would follow those bad television contents and go on the wrong track.
In conclusion, although disadvantages of spending long time on watching TV are obvious, I describe the opinion that unhealthy information on television put youngsters’ behavior at stake.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 99, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, while, i suppose, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1532.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33797909408 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07139250267 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.574912891986 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.934064459 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.846153846 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0769230769 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1538461538 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256855270856 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0893801979381 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544456840562 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150137087995 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0360630675171 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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