Some people say that what children watch influences their behavior. Others believe the amount of time they spend on television influences their behavior most. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is true that whether the length of time children spend on television may affect their behavior or the content of the program on television would influence their behavior most is a subject of debate. While reason can be given to justify the former, I am in favor of the latter.
On the one hand, there are strong reasons to think that the amount of time student spend on television affects their behavior. Firstly, watching television too much is a contributing factor influencing children’s health because if children become over-reliant on the television, they may face with sleeping and digestive disorders. For example, regardless of having headache and stomachache, my sister has still watched television at the same time with having dinner for 2 years. Secondly, in lieu of going outside with friends, children will neglect engagement in outdoor activities that result in the sedentary lifestyle. Finally, only when children become addicted to watching television, not only do they feel discouraged from having real interaction with people around them, but also they may find it hard to live in harmony with others and cannot meet the need of the development of social skills.
On the other hand, others would argue that the content of the program on television would influence children’s behavior most. The first prominent justification is that many programs on televisions may contain inappropriate materials such as violence, sex casual, and drug abuse, thus children will adopt the unhealthy lifestyle and cannot achieve a sense of satisfaction. For instance, my cousin used to utilize alcohol drinks when he was 12 years old since he thought that was fashionable as the advertisement on television. Furthermore, the more programs children watch, the more tired the can get owing to the fact that they will not concentrate on other important things. In addition, commercials also affect children behave that means young viewers could be easily swayed by advertisements for junk food or video games so their parents will buy them impulsively.
In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, although the length of time children spend on television may affect their behavior, it seems to me that the content of the program on television would influence their behavior most.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 544, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...dvertisement on television. Furthermore, the more programs children watch, the mo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, thus, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 7.85571142285 242% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1933.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 367.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26702997275 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90819061106 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561307901907 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.8266997824 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.692307692 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2307692308 20.7667163134 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.8461538462 7.06120827912 210% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244646491521 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0953056994561 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812374047798 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17829432811 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345818239939 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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