Some people think an aging population can cause big problems. Others, however, think the aging population has many advantages for business, government and for society in general. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
People have different views about whether old people would bring more benefits or drawbacks for business, government and for society in general. Although it can be argued that old people can cause several challenges, I believe that the advantages they bring would be bigger.
On the one hand, some people are convinced that an aging population can cause many disadvantages . Firstly, old people can negatively affect the development of companies. This is because they have low technological abilities while the young can catch up with the latest technical trend instantly and excel in computers. As a result, there will be less innovation and change in organization. Secondly, the generation can put a heavy pressure on the government and society. When there are more old people, there will be more pensions and healthcare services. Therefore, the government can suffer from financial problems. Besides , some old people who don't have any pensions can be a burden for their families.
On the other hand, from my view point, this generation can bring more benefits. To begin with, old people can perform better than the young as they have accumulated more skills and experiences. Therefore, they can bring valid values to the companies. Furthermore, there are more old people, there will be more volunteers for the economy. After a long time working, almost all old people have earned enough money that they can be willing to pay comfortably. This can help the economy improve and thrive.
In conclusion, while it is true that old people can cause many problems , I would completely agree that this generation can contribute a lot to business, governments and society in general.
- Some people believe that the most important aspect of their job is their salary Others think that the job itself is the most important What do you think is the most important aspect of a job Include specific details and examples to support your choice 11
- Some people think an aging population can cause big problems Others however think the aging population has many advantages for business government and for society in general Discuss both views and give your opinion 61
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, in general, as a result, it is true, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 7.85571142285 267% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 41.998997996 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1408.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15750915751 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77576906998 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534798534799 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.9051904152 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.8235294118 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0588235294 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0588235294 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234748529035 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0853851017117 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0828988324384 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171710017473 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459088614465 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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