Some people think an aging population can cause big problems. Others, however, think the aging population has many advantages for business, government and for society in general.
People have different views about whether an aging population would bring benefits or drawbacks. Although it can be argued that the aging population can have many advantages for business, government and for society, I believe that the aging population will cause big trouble.
A growing body of research suggests that the aging population has a generally positive effect on business, government and for society. One key benefit that they gain experiences during a long time, which the younger generation can not have immediately. It is obviously beneficial for business and government to build global chains with no risk. Beside that, they do not need to spend lots of money on training their employees. Taking Coca Cola as an example, most recruiters always tend to choose elder people to work for them.
However, there are also negative impacts which must be considered. One important issue is that the younger generation is more likely to catch up the news than the elder one, especially on the Internet era. This means that those who can not follow up the news immediately have difficulty creating modern stuffs such as gadgets and mobile devices. For instance, most of employees working for Apple belong to the young generation, especially gen Z, because they really understand what people need at the present, which can lead Apple to create necessary gadgets for their customers.
In conclusion, although the old generation can create some things by their experiences, they also are threats on the Internet era. In my opinion, despite having positive effects, I believe that the aging population is a potential threat to workforce nowadays.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 361, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the employees') or simply say ''most employees''.
Suggestion: most of the employees; most employees
...dgets and mobile devices. For instance, most of employees working for Apple belong to the young g...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, really, so, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1389.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20224719101 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68815772958 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.614232209738 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1108708505 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.846153846 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5384615385 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30769230769 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344764565718 0.244688304435 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112522366207 0.084324248473 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125584423479 0.0667982634062 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221083609831 0.151304729494 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144344198227 0.056905535591 254% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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