Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on the protection of wild animals, and that this money could be better spent on the human population. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on the protection of wild animals, and that this money could be better spent on the human population. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people suppose that instead of purring considerable part of resources on saving wild animals, it is more beneficial to put priority on human population. From my perspective, I disagree with this point of view. The reasons for this are twofold.

In the first place, any species have their own rights to live, but some are threaten by human activities. In deeds, it is due to industrialization, the living of wild animal is being narrowed. For example, had it not been for the expanding factories in Northern Vietnam, a large square of rain forest would have never been cut down, resulting in the dead of many kinds of bird and monkey as well as others. Further and even more significantly, hunting is more remarkable witnessed in some nations. This results in the phenomenon that some typical species like tiger or rhino are killed illegally for skin or horn. Therefore, it is our responsibility to put attention in protecting animals.

In the second place, reserving wildlife is beneficial to human in some ways. Initially, it gives us valuable opportunities to remain the ecological living in balance. undeniably, thanks to saving wildlife habitats, people stay in harmony with the nature. Equally important, keeping wildlife ecosystem could be advantageous to some local residents. For instance, on the ground of investing in multiplying Panda bear habitats, China attract a large amount of tourists annually, cultivating the living conditions of arround residents.

By the way of conclusion, I once again remind that spending budget and on securing wildlife animals is by no means inessential.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 77, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'threatened'.
Suggestion: threatened
... their own rights to live, but some are threaten by human activities. In deeds, it is du...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d have never been cut down, resulting in the dead of many kinds of bird and monke...
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Line 3, column 374, Rule ID: MANY_KINDS_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'birds'?
Suggestion: birds
...resulting in the dead of many kinds of bird and monkey as well as others. Further a...
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Line 3, column 445, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rs. Further and even more significantly, hunting is more remarkable witnessed in ...
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Line 3, column 610, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r rhino are killed illegally for skin or horn. Therefore, it is our responsibilit...
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Line 5, column 168, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Undeniably
...emain the ecological living in balance. undeniably, thanks to saving wildlife habitats, pe...
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Line 5, column 256, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Equally,
...people stay in harmony with the nature. Equally important, keeping wildlife ecosystem c...
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Line 5, column 432, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (China) must be used with a third-person verb: 'attracts'.
Suggestion: attracts
... multiplying Panda bear habitats, China attract a large amount of tourists annually, cu...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ce again remind that spending budget and on securing wildlife animals is by no me...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, as well as, by the way, in the first place, in the second place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1354.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2277992278 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02063780832 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.625482625483 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.1445073173 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.2666666667 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2666666667 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161250047748 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0524709016549 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409296053676 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0893398808133 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.06370293009 0.056905535591 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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