Some people think it is more important for government to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend on the treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people believe that government should provide public subsidies for the promotion of healthy lifestyle, rather than treatment for already ill people. In my opinion, both should be equally funded.
On the one hand, it is essential for government to prioritize expenditure for promoting a healthy lifestyle. First, there are a lot of people who are little aware of their daily habits carrying many health risks. For example, students and working people who usually have to stay in front of the computer screen on a daily basic, which leads to back pain and short-sight. Additionally, they sometimes pay no attention to keep themselves fit as most people have sedentary lifestyle. Second, a healthy lifestyle provides people with resistance to a vast number of illnesses. As a result, there will be a decrease in the number of people suffering from diseases if they have healthy eating habits and take regular exercise. Therefore, government should make an emphasis on launching health awareness campaigns.
On the other hand, government should also provide the same funding for treating ill people. First, undoubtedly, not all illnesses are the result of unhealthy lifestyle. As a matter of fact, a lot of people are suffering asthmas or stomach cancer, which are resulted from polluted air and contaminated water in cities. The failure in providing preventive medicine has also caused the increase in the variety of chronic diseases. Second, by treating the patients, scientists and medical practitioners can collect data to search for a cure and discovery new treatments. Thus, they can improve the quality of services as well as expand human’s horizon.
In conclusion, I wholeheartedly believe that whether people are healthy or not, they should be treat similarly by government, who can raise public awareness of healthy lifestyle and provide satisfying healthcare services as well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'treated'?
Suggestion: treated
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, similarly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, as a matter of fact, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1591.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32107023411 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85988966839 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581939799331 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0070306321 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4375 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6875 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5625 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272779573223 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0851625502638 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0857617964092 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181600832464 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0663388663782 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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