Some people think it is more important for government to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Governments in some countries spend large amounts of money on promoting awareness of a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness. While some may think that these are the right investments, I believe that allocating public funds to treat patients should be prioritized.
There are several reasons why it is unnecessary to expend government funds on consciousness raising of positive lifestyle. First of all, it would be a waste of money when government spend large amount of money on promoting healthy lifestyles. For example, it is extremely expensive to pay some services such as advertisement on television or social media for raising public awareness to avoid illness. Moreover, promotion of positive thinking does not have many effects when it is hard to change the habits of people. It is evident that there are a great number of books or newspapers which talk regularly about improvement of public health, yet the number of teenagers and adults who suffer from obesity or even cancers has been alarmingly increasing in the recent years. Therefore, it would not be effective if the government only concentrate on promoting a healthy lifestyle.
Advocates of encouraging people around the world to prevent illness through establishment of good habits would argue that such methods will help to avoid a host of health problems. However, such reasoning seems invalid because not all illnesses result from lifestyle choices. In reality, the appearance of a lot of strange diseases and people living in pollution areas or unhealthy conditions can prove that there is a need for the government to spend money on researching better treatments. Furthermore, the governments receive tax revenues from citizens, and must be responsible for taking care of taxpayers. Therefore, the government funding must be provided to many social services including healthcare.
In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I strongly believe the view that it is more necessary for government to spend public funds on treating patients instead of investing in promotion of a healthy lifestyle.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1757.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34042553191 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97258221851 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550151975684 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4807977977 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.5 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317799985456 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10235781682 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0756816382228 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199653968539 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0289803020383 0.056905535591 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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