Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is always has been the case that our lives intertwined with the lives of others. However, in the modern era, some people believe that dependency between people increased whilst others argue that people have grown to be more independent.
One reason why people think that we are more dependent on others is that with social media we seek validation from people. People are bombarded with images of beautiful models and rich people who seem to have perfect lives. Therefore, many people feel the need to go on social media and post their pictures expecting getting positive feedback. When people get likes from others it restores their self-image. Furthermore, because of our busy and hectic lives, we need help from others. Some parents, for instance, rely on their mothers to take care of their children while they are at work.
On the other hand, I believe people are generally becoming more independent. We can see that many people are choosing to reside in different cities or even different countries from their families. They led their own lives and rarely see their siblings or parents, which was a rare case in the past. In addition to this, people are more fond of their privacy and do not need others to help them. In many places, these days, people often do not know their neighbours or interact with them.
In conclusion, people rely on others on some occasions but certainly not as much as they used to do in old days. In my opinion, people are more independent and private.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 344, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...es expecting getting positive feedback. When people get likes from others it restore...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...eir neighbours or interact with them. In conclusion, people rely on others on so...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...as much as they used to do in old days. In my opinion, people are more independent...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1235.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 258.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78682170543 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38744902895 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554263565891 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 389.7 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.8512016253 49.4020404114 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.3333333333 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46666666667 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.363360506263 0.244688304435 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135667521611 0.084324248473 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110516712756 0.0667982634062 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243282479608 0.151304729494 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0307853563666 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.0946893788 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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