Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other while others think that people have become more independent Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Essay topics:

Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Many hold a belief that people are more intertwined dependent due to the ever-changing world; while opponents argue that with modern lifestyle, the public are inclined to do whatever they want and enjoy freedom and independent life. To the best of my knowledge, the later point of view is more reasonable for the following reasons.
Firstly, it is note-worthy that young generations quickly adapt to various environments, which is one of contributive factors to develop an independent personality. Nowadays, many sociological studies have shown that the growing development of contemporary society is accompanied by the self-sufficient ability of people. For example, Mr. Bill Gates, CEO founder of Microsoft Corporation, he used to neglect surrounding opinions and drop school but he succeeded in the personal computer revolution. This example is the illustration of the fact that independent people are able to overcome adversities, regard difficulties as an opportunity for personal growth and live our life to the fullest.
Secondly, the counter-argument raised by objectors to this is that residents have become more dependent on each other, because it can enhance good relations and help them to make suitable decisions. This argument could be true to some extent; however, it is incomplete. What they fail to take into account is the fact that if people always depend on other surroundings and have no individual opinions, they would be confused about their decisions in many cases. As a result, people are able to have difficulties and lost ability to solve problems.
In conclusion, independent lifestyle is more pervasive in modern life, which has effectively chronic effects on individuals as mentioned above.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun hold seems to be countable; consider using: 'Many holds'.
Suggestion: Many holds
Many hold a belief that people are more intertwin...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 355, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (CEO) must be used with a third-person verb: 'founders'.
Suggestion: founders
...eople. For example, Mr. Bill Gates, CEO founder of Microsoft Corporation, he used to ne...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 543, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... example is the illustration of the fact that independent people are able to over...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in many cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1456.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4328358209 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18745836746 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.641791044776 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2804422004 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.363636364 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3636363636 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6363636364 7.06120827912 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268116732809 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0826294581084 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556667969985 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143797945927 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.06568769629 0.056905535591 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.95 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 9.78957915832 174% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.