Some people think women should be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force just like men. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Women military service is one of the most controversial issues that people like debating about because most of the countries allow to make duty on male. Nowadays, we are living in the middle of paused war so that many countries prepare in their determine way respectively. Thus, some people insist all gender need to devote themselves to protect. In this essay, I will address my view and illustrate some examples that I know.
To begin with, this issue is undeniable that equally female and male have to complete by certain period of military service. There are plenty of reasons why we ought to encourage our physical resources. For illustrates, South Korea is still in the middle of war because of vested interests. Therefore, all gender should be prepared to combat when war start to occur. Even though women tend to avoid military service, at least some sorts of information must be informed such as how to hold or shoot guns, what would you do what if during exploding nuclear bomb near your area and basic protection skill in some cases.
The other reason is that women like minority have no ability to distinguish right from wrong if they are not allowed to contribute by serving army unless male who fully finished their service. And it will be caused huge problem; sexism. Male could be envisaged why we have disadvantage during military service and go through just ourselves without female. It could be possibly happened but I saw one of newsletter that it reported Korean ministry of National Defense officially announced it encourage tons of effort and money to establish for women army. Putting together both genders in congestion enable them to commit sexual crimes as well.
As a result, I believe female also need to be done in the force service and should be given the same opportunity however many reasons and dangerous situation can be occurring in a negative way. The government and related bureau may bring liable system to make equal sex value.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'making'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: making
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Message: Did you mean 'encourages'?
Suggestion: encourages
...ational Defense officially announced it encourage tons of effort and money to establish f...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...nd dangerous situation can be occurring in a negative way. The government and related bureau may ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, thus, well, at least, such as, as a result, in some cases, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1642.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90149253731 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53392222894 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.644776119403 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.7232522318 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.625 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9375 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6875 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206983847226 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0510785873948 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0478871587524 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113239539789 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0119384662321 0.056905535591 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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