Some people think young people should go to university to further their education while others think they should be encouraged to work as car mechanics or builders etc to serve society Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Some people think young people should go to university to further their education while others think they should be encouraged to work as car mechanics or builders etc. to serve society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

A certain number of people are of an opinion that university life should be educative, while others deem that students need to spend their time working in a sphere of service, like car mechanics or builders. In my opinion, working is not obligatory, but vital for students. In the following essay, I will discuss both opinions and give my own.

Of course, in order to be competitive students need to dedicate the majority of their time to lectures and individual works. Spending lots of time learning can reflect on marks, which are very important in university. Moreover, some students depend on their scholarships, while scholarships depend on the academic success of the students. That is why dedicating plenty of time to education is important for students.

On the other hand, working in a sphere of service can give useful experience and life-changing skills, including communication, critical thinking and problem-solving. Working at a young age creates a beneficial platform for the future because young employers form new bonding and connections, which can help them subsequently. Also, they can be useful for society since servants are very demanding in the modern world. For example, there is a huge demand for builders in Kazakhstan because the cities are growing dramatically fast.
In a nutshell, I personally believe that working as a student is very useful for them, as well as for society. They can contribute to the development of the country by working at a young age.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, well, while, as for, for example, of course, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1255.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 244.0 315.596192385 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14344262295 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00081452259 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577868852459 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 396.0 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.658339756 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5384615385 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7692307692 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07692307692 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246396432656 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0790499047324 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690320900648 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143830524662 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0979639125979 0.056905535591 172% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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