Some school leavers travel or work for a period of time instead of going directly to the university. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
After completing the program in high school, there are some options for students to follow. Different people will have their distinctive mindsets and thinking. While some students take a gap year for traveling or working, others decide to enter university directly for a higher degree. In my opinion, the merits of taking a gap year outweigh the drawbacks.
To commence with the first notion, there are lots of advantages when students spend a year making a trip. Firstly, traveling to many places, particularly to other countries will help them to broaden their knowledge base. By this I mean that, as students visit different places, they will learn about traditions, and meet many local people with various cultures. From that, they will enhance their knowledge and acquire social skills. Living in many places, they will have different viewpoints about life. In this sensible world, it will bring students closer to the community, foster harmony and fraternity between them and other people thereby improving the ability of adapting to international environments. The second lies in doing different kinds of jobs can have a full understanding of the pluses and minuses. Therefore, they can make decisions for their jobs, find a suitable major and advance their career faster. For instance, Vietnam has welcomed a lot of foreign students every year, who have a tendency to experience before attending university. They do some volunteer work and after this work, they will realize their dream, and pursue it.
Despite the benefits, there are a few obstacles for such a scenario. The foremost reason is that students lose their momentum. To explain this, the current knowledge may fade away due to a long time without practicing. They will have some difficulties in their studies if they go back to school. It will demand them to put more effort to keep up with their peers. Moreover, the gap requires precise planning. They must give a thorough thought about the choice, because during that time if they don't have enough budget on finding a job they might suffer from some psychological issues such as anxiety and depression. Even worst, this may push them to illegal activities: theft, consumption of drugs, and many more.
In conclusion, although each side of the situation has advantages and disadvantages. I believe spending a year traveling and working brings more benefits for the youth in order to discover their passions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, while, for instance, i mean, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2044.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 397.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14861460957 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65546144517 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 176.041082164 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581863979849 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 614.7 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.8060401614 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.1666666667 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5416666667 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 3.4128256513 293% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167019858795 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.046628885907 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551063994095 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121182545703 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0501533353459 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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