Some school leavers travel or work for a period of time instead of going directly to the university Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

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Some school leavers travel or work for a period of time instead of going directly to the university. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

It is becoming more popular for some graduated high school students to take a trip or be being employees for a year rather than attending university directly. In my opinion, the merits outweigh the drawbacks.
There are considerable benefits of traveling or working for a period of time before school leavers attend university. The first benefit is that high school graduates can gain more practical experiences including working experience and communication skills by being employees before studying higher education. As a result, they may hone many skills such as teamwork, multi-tasking, or the way to communicate with customers that can help them alleviate the woking pressure or stress when they having a long-term job. Moreover, spending time on working period can help them understand their strengths or weaknesses deeply in order to choose the most suitable major when applying for the university. Another advantage is that high school students can cultivate cultural and societal knowledge when they take a trip for a period of time instead of going intermediately to university. Through visiting many places, school leavers can expose to different cultures that bring to them an amount of knowledge about life, cultures, or society. These travel experiences they hone can be useful for their future jobs or widen their perspectives.
There are potential drawbacks of postponing going to university for a while to discover new places or working after graduating from high school. The first drawback is that getting jobs at a young age can make school leaver lose their study interest and are distracted from their academic goals. They are tempted into earning money and spend the majority of their time working that can lead to a decline in academic achievement and university skipping. Another disadvantage is that some inexperienced school leavers may be at risk of being exploited when doing entry-level jobs or suffer from potential dangers on their trips. The lack of practical experience, self-defense skills, and communication skills can lead young high school graduates to some unintended problems, such as scamming, bullying, and kidnapping.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, moreover, so, while, such as, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1825.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 339.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38348082596 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89575167811 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530973451327 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 556.2 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.087149959 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.357142857 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2142857143 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321356013523 0.244688304435 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117100644085 0.084324248473 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0869337943695 0.0667982634062 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20400541584 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0306562181658 0.056905535591 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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