Studies suggest that many teenagers these days prefer socialising online to meeting one another in person.
Why do you think this is the case?
What measures could be taken to encourage teenagers to spend more time meeting one another in person?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
According to recent studies,teenagers are reported to become less sociable than they were in the past. Most of them are now enjoying meeting new friends and participating in online forums rather than having face-to-face meeting with each other. From my perspective, the unimaginable development of the Internet is the main culprit and to address this phenomenom properly, more appealing incentives should be created by schools and society.
As far as the principal cause is concerned, the Internet and appearances of new social apps are to blame for this tendency. As a growing number of people are gaining access to social media everyday, it advertently creates a huge cyperspace for both teenagers and adults to expand their social circle with different Internet users in the world. Consequently, they no longer have to take part in outdoor activities to make new friends. By the same token, a large proportion of teenagers have also developed a new phenomenon termed " social anxiety", which means they dread the thought of meeting too many people and of course, a fear of standing in pulic. In addition, while the young people in real world frequently judge each other's looks and manner, they can go anononymous completely in the cyperspace without having to worry about their appearance.
Nevertheless, there are some viable solutions that can help teenagers to become more open and extrovert. Firstly, education experts should provide students woith more talks about the benefits and drawbacks of social media as well as instructing to speak their mind to integrate well into the society.Moreover, more fascinating activities that are suitable for youngsters such as camping or volunteering can more or less steer them out of the phone screen. Last not but least, social demands on teenagers should be adjusted properly since today's adolescene often feel anxious and diffident living up to their parents and the society's expectation.
In conclusion, although the Internet has connected each person closer to one another, it inadvertently extends the distance between teenagers and the real world. Therefore, young people should be given more attention and affection from their society so that they can confidently step out of their comfort zones.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, look, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, of course, such as, as well as, more or less, by the same token
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1916.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 358.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35195530726 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94026226068 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597765363128 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.2892722048 49.4020404114 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.384615385 106.682146367 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5384615385 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.9230769231 7.06120827912 211% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13443448832 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0483913452163 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0342029882005 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0869633520733 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0245396673724 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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