Techonology Has Changed The Way Children Spend Their Free Time. Do The Advantage Outweigh The Disadvantage?
Children these days do not spend their spare time properly because of the appearance of technology. While I accepted that technology brings children huge benefits if it is used in the right way, I believe that it is more likely to be harmful for kids to adjust the usual habits in the leisure time.
On the one hand, technology offers kids with attractive applications to entertain. Firstly, they can play games on their PC or mobile phones with other players in different states or even in another country. That way they are able to make new relationship and have knowledge about many cultures. Secondly, technology provides adolescents with affordable means of contact. For example, social networks such as Facebook or Instagram allow users to chat with people who are far away without any fee. Therefore, children no longer need to hang out to talk with their friends.
Despite the aforementioned advantages, I would argue that these benefits are outweighed by the drawbacks. Technology can be highly addictive because of its interesting and attractive applications. For instance, many children sit in front of their computers hours each day just to try to get a higher score than their friends in a normal game. It does not only affect their health but also their studying career that homework is sacrificed for a few more hours on the computer or console. Moreover, children eventually do not go out to do the social things. Thus in the future, they will not have the vital life skills.
In conclusion, it seems to me that the potential dangers of the change of anual habits in leisure time of children due to techonology are more significant than the possible benefits.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 558, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... do not go out to do the social things. Thus in the future, they will not have the v...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1406.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96819787986 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74395675171 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618374558304 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2009397347 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.7333333333 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8666666667 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.06666666667 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25610452112 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0726075215332 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0744008384524 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154587230432 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0618244311286 0.056905535591 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 558, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... do not go out to do the social things. Thus in the future, they will not have the v...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1406.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96819787986 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74395675171 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618374558304 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2009397347 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.7333333333 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8666666667 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.06666666667 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25610452112 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0726075215332 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0744008384524 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154587230432 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0618244311286 0.056905535591 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.