Television is dangerous because it destroys family life and any sense of community; instead of visiting people or talking with our family we just watch television. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Nowadays, the existence of television brings detrimental impact such as create a nuisance in sense of family and community. People tend to watch television instead of visiting and conversing with their family. Despite the merit, I believe that television give the demerit both in family and society which will elucidate in this essay.
On the one hand, the television displays information which can be main topic to start conversation with family and other people. In addition, discussion can be embarked in relatives with explain and talk about television program such as news and cinema. For example, when gather in a event with family members, and start to converse about earthquake that happen in Turkey through news program that television displays. As a result, this will make their relationship stronger.
Turning to other hand, television can make people lost of attention from their surrounding. In detail, television will deplete the attention of people when watch the television program, and it make them more focus on it as well as do not converse with other people in their surrounding. For instance, in the neighborhood event, when television program is started, people will give attention to this program, and they not utilize this time to converse and to get to know each other. Consequently, it will decrease sense of the community which should to be closer.
To sum up, even tough provide current information to start the conversation, people often to lost of their attention from their surrounding and it will decline the value of relationship both in family and community life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...and cinema. For example, when gather in a event with family members, and start to...
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Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
...en watch the television program, and it make them more focus on it as well as do not...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, so, well, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1348.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20463320463 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79996528695 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 176.041082164 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482625482625 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 415.8 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2027410031 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.333333333 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5833333333 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.25 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299698000687 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126886798802 0.084324248473 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639260590322 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195540306651 0.151304729494 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0762952842176 0.056905535591 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.