There are several factors that motivate people to stay in the workforce, and money is the most important reason/factor. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In this day and age, people are putting increasing emphasis and interest in work motivation. While some people believe that money is the most indispensable factor that helps people to stay in the workforce, others subscribe to the fact that happiness instead of money that will work. Personally, I partly agree with the former opinion and will give my logical reasons in the forthcoming paragraphs.
On the one hand, money is supposed to be the most crucial promotion for people to keep themselves in the workplace as this kind of material can give them a hand in making a living. This is because in the modern world, money is an item that can exchange for almost everything, ranging from clothes, food to health. As a matter of fact, people opt to stay under the pressure of work to earn money on the grounds that they can purchase items they need in life. By way of illustration, evidence from recent research carried out in USA suggests that 70% of both white-collar and blue-collar workers in this country choose to stay in the work environment to earn money by virtue of the reason mentioned above. Through this lens, it is quite obvious that the most significant reason for people to stay under work pressure is money.
On the other hand, those who disagree point out that happiness is the most likely to constitute people's promotion to remain in the workforce since it could make people more optimistic in life. This is due to the fact that the workplace provides people with a lot of sources of joy, such as having some small talks with workmates or having meals with colleagues and communicating with them. As a result, people can feel a sense of relaxation and relief after a lot of pressure that they have encountered from the changing modern society, resulting in a low rate of suicide on account of depression. Research conducted in Thailand in 2019, for example, revealed that 65% of Thai workers commute to the workplace on a daily basis to gain happiness through communication with other colleagues. Hence, it is undeniable that happiness is of great importance to promote people to keep themselves in the work surrounding.
In conclusion, although money and happiness are different in functions, they both succeed in contributing to people's most substantial motivation to remain in the workforce
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 110, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'people'.
Suggestion: people
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, so, while, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 41.998997996 188% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1928.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 394.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89340101523 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75690134707 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494923857868 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 585.9 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.9982992853 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.714285714 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1428571429 20.7667163134 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.85714285714 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238744653709 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.086045204953 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0676116762766 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156970679255 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0456668584009 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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