There are several factors that motivate people to stay in the workforce, and money is the most important reason/factor. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people think that to motivate people to stay in the workforce, there are many elements which are under the consideration, chief amongst them is money. In my opinion, I entirely agree with this point of view.
In the one hand, it is taken for granted that money play a crucial role in modern life, especially in the 21th century. A tangible reason is that it will level up people's life conditions. For example, persons who have a bunch of money will afford to buy luxury equipments and go on a trip regularly. If people cannot earn enough money for standard life, they will tend to look for a new job which has ability to fulfil their demands. Another primary reason is that money will give people's offspring opportunities to study in a good environment. For instance, most of famous schools in USA have a really high tuition so familys that do not have strong budget see that studying at this school is an impossible tasks with them.
In the other hand, there are some noticeable reasoning that stimulate people to continue their job. Firstly, they can learn many appreciated knowledges and experiences from working. These things will not only significantly support them in their future careers, but also make them more valuable in recuiter's eyes. Secondly, staying in the workforce will give people chances to translate our skill into benefits and training them to become better. If people do not laborious in training, their skills cannot improve and it will be despoil because of lacking attention. In conclusion, also there are a bunch of reasons to continue staying in the workforce, i think that money is the most important reason amongst them.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 600, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'bunches'?
Suggestion: bunches
...ention. In conclusion, also there are a bunch of reasons to continue staying in the w...
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Line 5, column 655, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...s to continue staying in the workforce, i think that money is the most important ...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1379.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87279151943 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57821740442 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.590106007067 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 425.7 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.5551337686 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2142857143 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.35714285714 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203028717253 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729336752085 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576977076901 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144109447111 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.022218464586 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 600, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'bunches'?
Suggestion: bunches
...ention. In conclusion, also there are a bunch of reasons to continue staying in the w...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 655, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...s to continue staying in the workforce, i think that money is the most important ...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1379.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87279151943 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57821740442 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.590106007067 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 425.7 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.5551337686 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2142857143 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.35714285714 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203028717253 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729336752085 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576977076901 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144109447111 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.022218464586 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.