There is a lot of pressure on young people today to succeed academically. As a result, some people believe that non-academic subjects, such as physical education and cookery, should be removed from the school syllabus so that children can concentrate on academic work.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.
It is widely acknowledged that a great number of young individuals tend to have pressure on how to be successful in academic-based subjects. Therefore, many people state that optional subjects should be removed from school in order to assist children with focusing on their academic majors. In my opinion, I moderately disagree with this statement due to the lack of entertainment and the necessity of life skills that may happen when removing non-academic subjects.
To start with, replacing non-academic subjects with necessary ones will be likely to help students with improving their academic subject results at school. Indeed, by eliminating optional subjects from the school syllabus, children can fully focus on their academic studies and reduce their pressure at school. Moreover, since the young generation does not have to acquire a wide range of knowledge from various subjects, their mentality may become less stressful. Subsequently, they would have a better quality of life. However, there are a number of factors, which should be considered carefully before adopting the given policy.
On the other hand, non-academic subjects at school are created to provide children with an entertaining environment after stressful hours with their academic subjects. An obvious example is physical education. Apparently, during these physical lessons, young people have to do exercises. Undoubtedly, these exercises prevent them from getting diseases such as obesity attributed to their habits of sitting for a long period of time to study both at home and school. Furthermore, non-academic domains also help the young generation gain more crucial skills for their lives after leaving school. For instance, cookery gives individuals recipes to prepare dishes for themselves. Without a doubt, they can become more independent and might not have to purchase food outside.
To sum up, the young generation in recent years are being forced to be successful in academic subjects. As a result, more people think that non-academic subjects ought to be eliminated from the school syllabus to help children to study better in academic subjects. In this essay, I mentioned entertaining and important life skills as factors to disagree with the given opinion. Finally, both academic and non-academic subjects are created to give students useful knowledge, so they would prepare for their future lives after graduating from schools.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 418, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, finally, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, for instance, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to start with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 41.998997996 160% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2059.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 373.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52010723861 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85728254936 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536193029491 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 506.74238477 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8066177893 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.368421053 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6315789474 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.57894736842 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.372593314442 0.244688304435 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118289775597 0.084324248473 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0972573200428 0.0667982634062 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262338816481 0.151304729494 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433915952127 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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