Topic: Many young people now know more about international pop and movie stars than famous people in the history of their countries. What are the causes? Give solutions to increase the number of people to know about famous people in history.
It is true that young people tend to interest the international pop and movie stars while they spend less attention on famous historical characters or events in their homeland. This essay shall analyze this phenomenon and has several solutions to reduce it.
First of all, there are some reasons why this issue becomes an upward trend. Nowadays, the entertainment aspects are developing dramatically by many music channels and movies which are watched by lots of households. As a result, various pop stars rise up and people will interest and want to find out about these people when watching them. Moreover, the Internet plays an important role in the artist by helping hundred of young talented artists become idols. Besides, people who are working as an artist in the showbiz will gain lots of reputation and wealth for them own. This creates a huge admire of young people to this new development entertainment aspects.
On the other hand, Young people at present like playing with friends rather than studying in class especially boring class subjects and many of them consider that the History subject is not interest at all. In addition, many historical events tend to show numerous bloody wars with huge casualties. This makes students underestimate and do not want to seek out those who fought for our nation.
To decrease this problem, teachers can help student's interest in historical aspects by analyzing the great virtues of historical characters with their achievements which provides more information so students to focus on their lessons. Furthermore, Historical movies can be a great solution which brings students to learn easily and remember it for long terms.
In conclusion, the appearance of music and movie channels makes children focus on international pop rather than finding the nation's history. Therefore, governments should invest in dual products that have education and entertainment to balance it which will be a promising solution for this matter.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 412, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a hundred'.
Suggestion: a hundred
...important role in the artist by helping hundred of young talented artists become idols....
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Line 3, column 26, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Young) must be used with a third-person verb: 'peoples'.
Suggestion: peoples
...ment aspects. On the other hand, Young people at present like playing with friends ra...
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Line 5, column 125, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...ternational pop rather than finding the nations history. Therefore, governments should ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, furthermore, moreover, so, therefore, while, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1667.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24213836478 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7396940378 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581761006289 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.723844001 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.133333333 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.66666666667 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234983496402 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072979417219 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.077229641715 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122361823129 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0632097457991 0.056905535591 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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