The use of mobile phones is harmful as smoking. Smoking is banned in certain places so mobile phones should be banned like smoking. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In this day and age, because of the proliferation of digital devices, it is believed that the use of smartphones is damaging like smoking and it should be prohibited in selected locations. Although this thinking is valid to a certain extent, I think that it would have negative impacts on both individuals and society in the long run.
On the one hand, there are a great number of factors why I support the idea that people should not use cell phones at several sites. First of all, some individuals tend to forget to turn off their mobile phones’ ring or make a vociferous voice when using them in public places, especially where it is necessary to keep quiet and not disturb others such as schools, libraries, hospitals, churches, means of transport, gas stations, etc. This means that shows a lack of awareness and disrespect for other people or is more likely to harm human lives in some cases. As a result, a few of those locations notify people about the regulations on using digital devices to minimize the possible consequence. For example, using mobile phones at gas stations is one of the causes of fire, damaging people and property. Secondly, children easily imitate adults’ unhealthy behaviors by observing their actions in daily activities. In addition, using smartphones continuously can destroy children’s natural growth, health and which leads to many diseases such as autism and behavioral disorders in children. Therefore, mobile phones should be banned in certain places where children spend time the most such as schools and parents should teach their children how to use smartphones properly in public. For instance, in Japan, schools do not permit to use of digital devices during studying time and it is controlled strictly.
On the other hand, I think that it could bring many detrimental impacts for each person as well as society in the long term. To begin with, it is undeniable that the development of technology especially smartphones brings many advantages and support to present life. To be more specific, it helps people to access a huge of information on the internet for a variety of needs such as study, work, travel, and entertainment anywhere and anytime. As a result, if using cell phones is limited in certain sites, which leads to reducing life performance in some cases. For example, in North Korea, the government applies regulations restricting the use of mobile phones and the internet for military purposes, but it makes their citizens outdated and backward compared to the world. Another reason is that smartphones are more compact than other traditional tools or devices such as books, notes, desktops, cameras, etc. This means that it supports well for any purpose including studying at school, working at an office or shopping online, etc. Therefore, it saves cost and time for daily activities, which results in improving the quality of people’s life.
In conclusion, although I agree that mobile phone usage has harmful in several cases, I am of the opinion that it should not be banned like smoking because of its benefits for human daily activities and life development in the long term. By raising awareness, it can reduce some detrimental effects of digital devices.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1335, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'using'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'permit' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: using
...stance, in Japan, schools do not permit to use of digital devices during studying time...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, first of all, in some cases, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 10.4138276553 211% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 41.998997996 167% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2702.0 1615.20841683 167% => OK
No of words: 534.0 315.596192385 169% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05992509363 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80712388197 4.20363070211 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73721794446 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 176.041082164 153% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503745318352 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 849.6 506.74238477 168% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.5937534796 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.666666667 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4285714286 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1904761905 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252547833121 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0677655264798 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0844035241552 0.0667982634062 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170067928709 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0734003611055 0.056905535591 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 78.4519038076 176% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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