Women are better at childcare than men therefore they should focus more on raising children and less on their working life To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

It is a long-standing concept which has been established in the human society since the beginning of the civilization, that the females are responsible for taking care of the babies as they are fit for it. However, in the modern society, females are coming out of this concept and they are proving that they can also do many other works as a man can do, even better than them to some extent. Nevertheless, considering the social stabilization, many people want to prioritize women work in raising children than doing other outside jobs. Though, my view partially agrees to this statement, but doesn't allow making a barrier for women taking the opportunity to do something which is defined as men's job by the society, if they are skilled enough for performing that.

It is appeared to be true that naturally females are more prone to taking care and growing their offspring than men. Nature created females for concepting childs in their wombs. After giving birth to their babies, as a part of their natural instict, they are more inclined to raising and protecting their kids compared to male in every types of species. For instance, since the start of the human kind, generation after generation our social norms and order is shaped with this system that women take care of household activities including growing their babies while men earn for living. This is how our civilization is built and human nation is conituing to grow in an organized way.

However, with the advent of educational facilities, women are now becoming knowledgeable and expert in modern corporate working system. So, we can see that women can also perform the duties and responsibilities with the same skills as men can do. This in turn raising the concept, that if women are able to do those jobs similarly like men, why they will be stayed away from that. Considering the personal choice and freedom, it should not be the legal to confined women for doing some kinds of jobs which are assigned by the society. It is true that, for an organized society and healthy human nation, mothers care for children is inevitable. That is why; governments are making policy for providing maternal leave necessary for post partum taking care of their babies. But, men cannot deny their responsibility for growing the babies either.

It is the responsibility for both the men women to take care of their babies equally. Probably, previously men were more fit to work outsides since earning living was more physically demanded than todays job system and work environment. But, now a days, brain are more powerful tool for earning money than physical labour which women proved that they can do it very well. So, we should come out of this concept that only women should be assigned for raising children, and society should reshape their concept.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, nevertheless, similarly, so, well, while, for instance, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 13.1623246493 228% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 49.0 24.0651302605 204% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2292.0 1615.20841683 142% => OK
No of words: 477.0 315.596192385 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80503144654 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51577742779 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448637316562 0.561755894193 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 731.7 506.74238477 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 477.0 20.2975951904 2350% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2292.0 106.682146367 2148% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 477.0 20.7667163134 2297% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 90.0 7.06120827912 1275% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292708576642 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.292708576642 0.084324248473 347% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210494380952 0.151304729494 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427562722271 0.056905535591 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 239.7 13.0946893788 1831% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -404.22 50.2224549098 -805% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 188.1 11.3001002004 1665% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.1 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 30.27 8.58950901804 352% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 57.0 9.78957915832 582% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 192.8 10.1190380762 1905% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 57.0 10.7795591182 529% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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