WRITING TASK 2
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Many people now undertake extreme activities, from hang-gliding to mountain climbing.
Why do people risk their lives in this way, and do you think this is a good trend?
Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.
People nowadays are so curious about to do their thrilling activities like mountain climbling,hang- gliding like so on. Doing this kind of activity risk their life in all form of way eventhough people are not bothering the risk they face during their activities
Mountain climbing is a sport or hobby both are done dependent upon the individuals. During mountain climbing they face a lot of risks during their journey . Especially one of the famous mountain climbing spot and it is the dream of many who need to climb upon it because it is the most highest mountain which is located in india.Many try to reach the top most part of the hill but it is most difficult task even though fewer has made it.Hobby makes the person more additive than other things because a person who is more passionate about an thing he does not see any risk or struggle in that task.
Many People climbing the mountain which risks their life because that kind of satisfaction can get when they achieve the goal.This kind of feel they could not get from any kind of activities.one person who got hypoxia while reaching the middle of the mountain eventhough he could not stand up but he tried with his full power and reached the top of the hill for his own child because she wanted to be there but unfortunately she had passed away. This was the reason of that man to do that activity. Many people get hypoxia,fractures,hypothermia,fever while climbing even though other extreme activities like hang glide,skating,snow gliding,para gliding has many risks and struggles.
However,as I mentioned above those are the complications while doing their activities.yes I agree with these kind activities because to show their talent and for their satisfaction.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , hang
...lling activities like mountain climbling,hang- gliding like so on. Doing this kind of...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...face a lot of risks during their journey . Especially one of the famous mountain c...
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Line 3, column 282, Rule ID: MOST_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'highest' (without 'most') when you use the superlative.
Suggestion: highest
...need to climb upon it because it is the most highest mountain which is located in india.Many...
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Line 3, column 282, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'most the highest'.
Suggestion: most the highest
...need to climb upon it because it is the most highest mountain which is located in india.Many...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Many
...hest mountain which is located in india.Many try to reach the top most part of the h...
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Line 3, column 330, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun try seems to be countable; consider using: 'Many tries'.
Suggestion: Many tries
...hest mountain which is located in india.Many try to reach the top most part of the hill ...
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Suggestion: Hobby
...cult task even though fewer has made it.Hobby makes the person more additive than oth...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...e a person who is more passionate about an thing he does not see any risk or strug...
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Suggestion: This
...tion can get when they achieve the goal.This kind of feel they could not get from an...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , fractures
...o that activity. Many people get hypoxia,fractures,hypothermia,fever while climbing even t...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , fever
...people get hypoxia,fractures,hypothermia,fever while climbing even though other extrem...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , skating
...other extreme activities like hang glide,skating,snow gliding,para gliding has many risk...
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Suggestion: , para
...ies like hang glide,skating,snow gliding,para gliding has many risks and struggles. ...
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Suggestion: , as
...as many risks and struggles. However,as I mentioned above those are the complic...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, while, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1444.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94520547945 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24394067673 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52397260274 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 20.2975951904 177% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 142.349920969 49.4020404114 288% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 180.5 106.682146367 169% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.5 20.7667163134 176% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 7.06120827912 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.01903807615 279% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293226393431 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147967514332 0.084324248473 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057823420942 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182311208764 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0739060357184 0.056905535591 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.1 13.0946893788 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.4 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 78.4519038076 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.1190380762 162% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.