Young people are often influenced in their behaviors and situations by others in the same age group. This is called “peer pressure”. Do the disadvantages of peer pressure outweigh the advantages?
Commonly, young generations undergo peer pressure, which forces them to endeavor to achieve what their peers do. From my viewpoint, the positive effects of this phenomenon on individuals are more significant than some minor drawbacks.
In terms of negative aspects, peer pressure might not only cause discontent and even depression in young people but also, in some ways, egg them on to engage in inappropriate behaviors. First and foremost, trying to keep up with the success of friends tends to have a detrimental impact if adolescents experience failures and feel inferior to others, leading to unhappiness and despair. This is an alarming issue as the worst consequence that may happen is suicide and a typical example is Japan where most suicides are among men aged 20-44. In addition, once adolescents are under a lot of peer pressure, following wrong ways to obtain what others have is inevitable. To illustrate, when facing the pressure of being rich, some are likely to be involved in illegal activities, such as drug trading or fraudulent behaviors.
However, I believe that peer pressure plays a crucial role in reinforcing positive habits and attitudes thereby fostering personal growth and then social development. When surrounded by peers who excel academically, and succeed in their careers, the young would be inspired to push their boundaries and strive for greater achievements. For instance, in top-tier universities where numerous students are good at academic fields and soft skills, each individual would be encouraged to broaden their horizons, spend time on sharpening skills and knowledge, and ultimately become comprehensive citizens contributing to social development. In contrast, if there is no comparison with other people, young people might remain complacent and fail to reach their full potential, hindering the sustainable development of each individual and society in the future. To illustrate, in a working environment, without a sense of competition, it can be difficult to have new initiatives to improve productivity and upscale the business as employees do not have the spirit of striving their best like other colleagues to be better every day.
In conclusion, I opine that the positive aspects of this influence trump the negative ones. As long as young people are guided to only focus on beneficial influences, they can thrive in their personal and social lives.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 583, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun peer seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of peers'.
Suggestion: a lot of peers
...In addition, once adolescents are under a lot of peer pressure, following wrong ways to obtai...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, then, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2036.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 379.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37203166227 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99475898761 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 176.041082164 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622691292876 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.4563276919 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.428571429 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0714285714 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.71428571429 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255969043026 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802662003428 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538743446549 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148216709179 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0204581589311 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.0946893788 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.93 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 78.4519038076 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 583, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun peer seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of peers'.
Suggestion: a lot of peers
...In addition, once adolescents are under a lot of peer pressure, following wrong ways to obtai...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, then, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2036.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 379.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37203166227 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99475898761 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 176.041082164 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622691292876 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.4563276919 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.428571429 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0714285714 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.71428571429 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255969043026 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802662003428 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538743446549 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148216709179 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0204581589311 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.0946893788 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.93 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 78.4519038076 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.