Young people who commit serious crimes such as a rubbery or a violent attack should be punished in the same way as adults.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Young people who commit serious crimes such as a rubbery or a violent attack should be punished in the same way as adults.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Submitted by melodylcc on Sun, 12/23/2018 - 07:27

Juvenile delinquency is becoming an increase concerns. Some people claim that the lenient sentence can not curb the major crimes. As far as I am concerned, I can not totally agree with this.
The reason of advocate of the young criminals should be punished as adults is that it is a feasible way to deterring them from re-offending. Besides, it is extremely unbiased for the victims if the criminals escaped from the harsh punishment just simply because of the young age. Moreover, without the server sentence, they would not realize the serious after effect of their heinous behaviour and leave the victims and their families suffering. Simply, the best solution is treat them like adults if the crimes they committed are every bit as heinous as adults.
However, juvenile do not have the same physical and mental condition as the grow-up. Therefore, the server punishment would not have much effect on them. Additionally, they may not have adequate endurance so that the server punishment could probably destroy their whole life and future. Compared with the adults offenders, the young ones have greater possibility to reestablish the value , return to normal life and even shift gears to become the leaders of certain areas. Also, they are more capable of learning from their mistakes. Once they understand the consequence of their acts and find the desired life goal, they would rehabilitate much faster.
In conclusion, I believe that the naive and young as the young offenders are, for the long term benefit, rigorous education and chances should be offered to them. However, if they break the law again, there is no excuse for them to get rid of equivalent punishments as the grow-up.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 387, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1414.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03202846975 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59294310698 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583629893238 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.257995858 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2666666667 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7333333333 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73333333333 7.06120827912 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150513554832 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0468639338112 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426054000771 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0842529811054 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421094284872 0.056905535591 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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