In modern world many children spend a lot of time in front of computers television and smartphones This is very harmful to them To what extent do you agree

In the recent decades, besides the development of technology, children nowadays also have new habits and the most harmful activity can be considered is spending too much time in using modern equipments such as computers, television and smartphones. In my opinion, this is a unhealthy and not balanced lifestyle in both adults and children. In this essay, I will clear my view by relevant examples.

In one hand, kids should spend more time in outdoor activities than staying at home with technology products. As a result for this, parents should control kids's free times by balancing between using technologies and playing outside. Children have to be directed to do sports or some games without computers and and smartphones. Furthermore, kids also need to spend time on learning more by reading books or do self study. In the other words, parents cannot supervise all things that kids do in the Internet or what they watch on the television. For example, there are many contents on websites which may be violent videos or games. It is too dangerous to let kids see them. As a consequence, the kids's psychology are affected easily by toxic things.

Moreover, young generation should be constructed healthy lifestyle instead of abusing entertainment from technology. Adolescents should do practical action against this problem as limiting time children use technical products and encouraging kids enjoy real life. The bad habits effect on health a lots because they are a cause leading to be a weak body. Finally, because of lacking outdoor activities, kids easily get diseases.

In including, I totally agree with issue that kids spend a lot of times with computers, televisions and smartphones is negative.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, for example, such as, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1440.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17985611511 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85299650336 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.636690647482 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.3110344591 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.375 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260589241831 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707910092781 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0566906224958 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155452185255 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048513089045 0.056905535591 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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